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While I'm writing poetry, music with words or that evokes a powerful, concrete image (like soundtrack music) is distracting; however, to get me in the mood to write poetry, I listen to bands that have poetry-like lyrics (great example: R.E.M.). Though in general I find it easier to...

another newbie interjects his thoughts As someone whose only posts have been in the Writing and Publishing Forum (until now), I thought I might add something. I came here on a tip from phil_t, who I know in a different incarnation, mainly to get criticism of my poetry. As in, people telling...

A gem of a turd, novella. However, I thought this sentence was extremely accurate, and has a place in a more sincere piece, of a different style: Maybe it's just that I've had too many encounters like that, though. *wink*

I think it works much better as prose than as a poem. As a poem, I'm less open to the immediacy and wash of emotions that the prose form brings--I'm not sure why, since there have been many, many times when a poem has brought those intense feelings along with it. Perhaps the complex syntax...

On the topic of Iraq, I found it amusing that the vaunted "shock and awe" attack policy was pretty much the same as the WW2 "blitzkrieg" but they didn't call it that. On a more related note, what amuses me more than typical word pairings (which are slightly silly when you think about them)...

Thanks--that's high praise. And I was worried about the wordiness of the title, as well. *thinks* How about one of these: Photo Album Memories A Rediscovered Photograph

Well thanks. *grin* Specific feedback is always appreciated. 1. The grammarian in my doesn't want to leave it as 'emotionless', unless the word had commas around it. Hmmm, how about "coldly" as a replacement? I like that. 2. Without the red, the parallels to the next line go away, and I...

Got it in one. I wrote it after I ended a very long, very deep relationship that the other person did not want to end. Not the best day in my life. *cough* That said, though, it seems somehow 'rough' to me, in a way I can't really explain. I'm really looking for more solutions to improve...

Narcissus and Echo, by Fred Chapell, is the perfect example, but the site that had the full-text poem has now removed it, and I left my Norton Reader at my house, so I'm not a lot of help...the way it's structured, Narcissus speaks, and Echo has one word at the end of every line, which is an...

Hmm, emotionlessly is a bit wordy....anyone have any suggestions? Blankly? Stoically? I'm glad you like the 3rd stanza...it's the most emotionally charged for me. And while it's not Anne Rice-inspired, it is about a pretty bleak subject. It's not literal, though--anyone want to hazard a...

Again, the usual plea--criticism in any form, the good and the bad, what you like and what you don't like, all that jazz. Please take the time to comment, even if it's just a response and not suggestions for improvement. I really appreciate it. The Undead by Ross Shingledecker 6/24/04...

There are four or five of my poems on this board...I'll eventually post more. Thanks--I'd love to hear what you think of the rest.

Again, no comment means either you're shocked in wonder at its verbal potentcy or too polite to tell me it should be thrown out with the slop bucket. I would really appreciate some feedback.

Thanks--the poem is a bit haunting for me as well, because the picture is of myself and one of my exes, with whom I was very close for a long time. But thanks about the parallel structure, I wasn't sure if it was too forced or contrived. But I like the veranda story better. Do you think...

Very good, as everyone has said. I both envy and pity this woman. One thing--if you broke the textblock up into paragraphs it might be a lot easier to read.

Nobody? That means it's either perfect or too horrible to salvage...*grin* Unless someone says something, I guess I'll have to assume the former.*wanders off in blissful ignorance*

Again, I beg for any critique, positive or negative, that you may have to give. I will not improve unless someone points out an error or identifies the best parts. Upon Finding a Thought-Evoking Photograph Among a Pile of Others Ross Shingledecker 2/13/04 Their eyes are dazzling, or...

But when has idea-theft been so poetically formed?

Same request as always--please comment and critique, good and bad (especially bad, to help me improve). Upon review, this poem has much the same theme and some of the same imagery as the earlier posted "Beach Music," though arising from a completely different event. Dispatched By Ross...

"Art is Either Plagirism or Revolution" --NYC marquee, 1992 Thanks again for pointing out the error.