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Intriguing--I'm trying to ignore the little voice in my head that it screaming for more information. *grin* Purely grammatically, I think the comma before "deftly" isn't necessary. On a more stylistic note, the power it has (and it has power) arise from very specific word choice...so...

Thanks, and yeah, that's an allusion to the Keats poem (and it's "on", I think). I"m not sure if that's too much an ostentatious reference, but it does reinforce the simplicity. I must confess that the elemental/elementary combination wasn't an idea of mine--in Spanish, they are the same...

Genesis Ross Shingledecker 8/27/03 This is not a Grecian Urn but a simple pot of clay in muted earthen tones an elementary thing and yet elemental He is not an artisan but a simple potter with gentle callused hands he makes the simple pots ordinary but profound He draws the...

Despite the title of the poem, the body of it isn't about the "beautiful place" mentioned in line 1...it's about really the opposite. I suppose the title could be ironic, but since you did mention the existence of that other place at the start of the poem, I kept expecting to hear more about it...

Aww, thanks. And I NEVER wear anything under my kilt.

Douglas Adams (God rest his soul) was one of the funniest writers I've ever had the priviledge of reading. I mourned his passing. *sad smile* But, like the reincarnated monster that hunts Arthur Dent, Adams's work lives on.

aww, thanks, I feel so much more welcome. Naturally, I'm all for the puppies-in-candlelight shish-kabobs.

Hey, fellow readers! I'm a recovering book hermit turned student and actor, whose busier life leaves less time for reading than he'd like, and who sometimes makes wild logorrheac stabs at writing that occasionally become poems. Even more rarely, they're worth showing to other people, and...

This really speaks to a feeling I think everyone experiences at some point. Line 2's lack of what I'll call grammar (though in poetry that doesn't always appy) makes it stick out, and not in a good way, since the rest of the poem is grammatically sound. Line 4's "private, inner" is...

Yeah, I know what you mean--it's supposed to be a normal indent but without any space in between the lines...I guess it could just be a bunch of three-line stanzas, though. Anything else anyone wants to comment on? Critique? Improve?

After reading a great poem, Narcissus and Echo, by Fred Chapell, I decided to try my hand at echo verse...and failed miserably (I like exploring fixed or structured poetry, even if I end up writing the poem in free verse most of the time). I've tried on and off for a bit, never with any...

Here's another offering, and like the first one, please don't pull punches--give me the good (assuming it's there), the bad, the ugly, and the hideously deformed. Okay, maybe not the hideously deformed. But please, honest and constructive critique is very much appreciated! [Edit note--the...

The first two lines are very close to something I read a long long time ago...I don't remember what from, or how the original went, but it was so powerful that more than 10 years from that day I still remembered its meaning. I think it was a Native American saying, but I can't be sure. As for...

Yes, my name's Ross (this poem was, in fact, written by me *grin*). Acolyte is usually my online handle, so people might recognize me from other forums on a variety of topics--but I usually put up poetry under my real name, as it's a bit more personal in nature. Thanks for the praise, and I...

I'm always looking for constuctive feedback on my poetry--only with criticism can I improve, and I won't get offended even if you have something negative to say (though pointing out the good parts, assuming there are any, is also cool and helpful). Here's one I wrote recently. I appreciate any...