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Thank you, Tugger, for giving me the courage to leap, when I was this close to giving up. This poem is about one my characters. The Gypsy He sings to the rhythm of the horse’s gentle trot He sings as the caravans wheel in. He tickles me with silly jokes and laughter I tickle him with...

What are you on about? I don't usually read this thread and I haven't a clue what you mean. How come I'm the shameless hussy all of a sudden? I thought that role was rotated, in turn, around all female members (and Martin, of course, because he's Dutch). It must be Ashlea's turn...

I'm going to be really annoying, and cheat :) An excerpt from my book. Name shortened to protect the name of my character ;) [Written by Colin, the lawyer] He was most particular about footwear. I suggested he should get a pair of lace-ups to wear with the suit he had bought, but he...

No! It's rude to talk when your mouth is . . . Third Man Girl

Chocolate Liqueurs. Nibble the end and . . . oh, never mind . . . :o Third Man Girl

Yes. But don't fail to forget Phyllis, the phenomenally fat fairy :) Third Man Girl

Yep. And the best part is making up ;) Third Man Girl

Mmmmm. Still tingling. May I tuck this one away, too? Beside the last one? Third Man Girl

Oh, goody. Our first tiff. :) Well, you claimed to like my poetry. And I didn't 'generally understand' what I was doing. Were you winding me up? *small fists raised* :mad: Third Man Girl

LOL. Litany you are on form tonight. :D As always :) Third Man Girl

Thank you for taking the time to explain it to me, Mile-O. And forgive my lack of understanding. You have shed light, not only on the poem, but on yourself :) Third Man Girl

I want to be left at the foot of my wondrous viaduct, for days, in a pool of blackened blood, and have people point and stare and whisper . . . 'why didn't the foolish girl wear a helmet?' (Yes Martin, that was aimed at YOU :D) ;) ) Third Man Girl

That's my favourite stanza(?). But, Poet, that is gorgeous. Ever word, every line. I'm tingling :o Third Man Girl

LOL :D :D :D Third Man Girl

Too much harrow, not enough raunch, imo ;) I didn’t much like the character. He seemed rather aloof. In fact, I got to the point where I didn’t much care whether he did get harrowed – or raunched :D Beautifully descriptive though. Third Man Girl

This would only scare me away. An analogy: I used to show boxers (dogs – not pugilists or underpants). The more I learned about how they should look, the more I found fault. I began to look at a dog and judge its overshot jaw, lay of shoulder, brindling. I could no longer look at the dog and see...

I would love to be able to tell you what I think, but this is too clever for me. I get bogged down with the big words. And don't tell me to buy a dictionary - Chambers is in my lap as we speak. Anyway, I’m still a bit cross that you didn’t respond to me, when I responded to you, about your...

But, Poet, would you have listened? ;) Or, would you have made the same mistakes that you did and had the same fun and heartache making them? You told me a while back to ‘follow my heart’ when I’m writing. I guess this is what you are telling your son about life? You sound like a good father...

No, don't wince. Please, don't wince. Comment. For song lyrics, I would keep She is the one. For a poem, I would leave those lines out. I found them distracting. On the negative side, personally I didn’t like the line: ‘She can be gone with its next beating.’ Made me think ‘Nickelback’ and...

Poet, do you want all my thoughts on the poem, or just the good ones? Third Man Girl