Haiku

[Kenji]

My attempts at poetry being rather embarrassing, i'll risk a couple of little haiku. (5-7-5 syllable pattern)


I've caught the moonlight,
Enclosed in this small casket
As your secret gift.


Red maple now bare.
Here lies- beneath- poor bunny.
But soon, the snowdrops.

 

[ctadams]

Much more pragmatic (sadly)

My boring work week
Seems to go on forever.
Will it ever END?

 

[Ell]

Soft inner voices:
Melancholy memories
Waiting to be heard.


Winter-stifled thoughts
Clawing up through the hoarfrost
At last in the sun.


Sower of dissent
Deceptively innocent
Retreats back and laughs.


and this one for bobbyburns:

Vaguely disruptive.
Midst meaningless blathering:
A profound truth waits.

 

[Wabbit]

Very nice Ell

 

[novella]

Mist in the valley
Settles around our mountain
We live in heaven


Black dog in fresh snow
Nuzzling his nose through white
Can he be happy?



Does anyone know about the rules of haiku for traditional Japanese forms? I believe there is supposed to be a seasonal word, an image of nature, a revelation, and other elements like that which expose the reader to a new view of something known. Sometimes there are two sections that complement each other.

 

[Ell]

Here's a link

 

[Eugen]

Here's a link

Thanks, Ell. Gave me insight, I was floating a bit.