I can write

[stigmaticman]

having takled this great feet
things aren't what they seem
the world spins and I dont

Im on the path, signs point
in the direction that Im going
but how much longer can I go

 

[Duvodas]

having First, start with capital letters takled this great feet

Isn't it supposed to be these...feet? You're using plural. ?

things aren't what they seem
the world spins and I dont

I think that after seem you should put a period as well as after "dont" (apostrophe , pls).

Im on the path, signs point
in the direction that Im going
but how much longer can I go

Use "I'm" or "I am" and put a question mark after go, since I assume the last verse is a question.

Overall is was good but sad at the same time, in my humble point of view. It makes me think that you're having a depressing time or something. Keep writing, it's the only way to improve.

 

[stigmaticman]

lol
it wasn't meant to be purfect
but I'll try next time

 

[Duvodas]

lol
it wasn't meant to be purfect
but I'll try next time

Well, even if it wasn't, you should try to correct those types of erros before you post, just and advice based on self-experience

 

[Poppy1]

Hey, Duvodas, whatchu doing on this thread ? - it's supposed to be R18

 

[Duvodas]

LOL, that was a good one.

 

[Poppy1]

having takled this great feet
things aren't what they seem
the world spins and I dont

Im on the path, signs point
in the direction that Im going
but how much longer can I go

I think what you are saying here, Stig, is that you have writer's block. Right? (please correct me if I'm wrong). But you say it in an enigmatic way and it can have several meanings. It's very clever, I like it a lot.

Please don't stop writing because of spelling mistakes, they can be corrected in a tick.
You don't have to read to sing.
You don't have to spell to dream poetry.

 

[Sitaram]

When we were children, our teachers stressed the important difference between saying "can" and "may". Sometimes we were told, "You can, but you may not."

Rather than say "I can write", one should say "I may write."

The spirit is willing but the flesh is weak.

 

[stigmaticman]

the poem was a play on idioms about how I was feeling while writing

but the first half was lost when I edited
it was too mature for some eyes
so I cut it
the poem was a study anyways

 

[veggiedog]

I like this poem, and I'm not much of a poem-liker, so to speak.
What "great feat" are you speaking of in the first line?
I think I understand a little of what you are saying. Sometimes I feel that way too.
Keep it up!