Johnny Walker's Thong.

[manuscriptx]

I like to play an old game called ping, pong.
ever meant to long after, drool over or fawn.

Seems a bit late to sing a song,
let my dog do his thing on someone's lawn.

I can smell the stench in the air,
while he takes a sip of sparkling Perrier.

My dog tells me he's done by slight wimpering,
his tail wags and heavy urine that's trickling.

Does this poem make you laugh or smile?
Women wondering is this lame or vile?

Monitors will erase it and make everyone forget all about,
snickers and suffering from a disease called Gout.

I once loved a woman 'Lenore',
never once snore or felt like a bore.

This poem is all but quite over,
do I get a freebie or a chance to do over?

 

[SevenWritez]

Write a story, your poems have become dull. Not to say you're a bad writer, just that these are boring. And you have a wit to your poems which is nice, but apply them to something - you know- not boring.

 

[manuscriptx]

2+2 = 4

I like the way you cram compliment in with the criticism,
so as not to tip your hat in either direction.

Very moderate of you.

 

[SevenWritez]

I like the way you cram compliment in with the criticism,
so as not to tip your hat in either direction.

Very moderate of you.

Compliment? I said you weren't a bad writer, which you aren't, but you're not good, either. Nowhere even close. But hey, roll with it, and smoke that cigar.

 

[manuscriptx]

Hmmm.

And you picked this particular poem thread to say that.

 

[SevenWritez]

And you picked this particular poem thread to say that.

Maybe it hasn't occured to you yet, but you fill this forum up with every half-assed thing you think up. Put it all in one "Manuscript's Mediocrity," so that I don't have to skim through them all to find someone elses work. I posted the earlier comment to at least see if you could do something else, verses "I am among the elite of literary Gods, no one likes my stuff, and for that, I am better than them...read my poem," work.

 

[manuscriptx]

?

I stand in dumbfoundment. I have no idea what
exactly you are trying to convey, but I imagine
it's something significant.

As significant as everyone else's jibberish against me.
Since you know what I think of most others here,
their opinions, perspectives and periodic lame criticism,
need I tell you what you can do with yours?

( Hint. It has something to do with a pitchfork and your butt cheeks. )

 

[SevenWritez]

Since you know what I think of most others here,
their opinions, perspectives and periodic lame criticism,

Then why in God's name do you still post your horrid crap here? Here, I'll be blunt; your poems suck. Did you read the Revelations thread? That was a nice read. Learn from it.

 

[manuscriptx]

Big deal.

What YOU like is not necessarily what EVERYONE ELSE likes.
There's a difference, learn from it.


A few people liked a couple of my poems.
If you bother to read, scan backward and see exactly
what poem it was and who they were.

 

[SevenWritez]

What YOU like is not necessarily what EVERYONE ELSE likes.
There's a difference, learn from it.

Um, no shit? But how's about instead of posting your two second read poems in every new thread, you do a "Manuscript's Poems." This way, all your "fans," can go to that forum with every new update versus you putting up a new one every other day.