Maybe that's the problem......
In writing my novel 181, I am thinking about " the normal description " of a particular something. What I see, what I feel, what I say or do, as well as the other persons of the story.
When I say any idiot can write the obvious, I mean any idiot can write the obvious about anything.
The sun is up, it's bright, warm, there may be insects flying around, someone may lick their lips, someone may wipe the sweat off their brow, chewing gum may be stepped on and stretched out.
Well yeah, duh. I feel the obvious and plain description just doens't work for me. It's boring, it's simple, and without even guessing I know it's been written a million times before in a billion stories.
A little complexity can't hurt, even something out of grammar.
Most people recognize " ebonics " as a language all it's own black people speak. No one's going to tell them to stop and speak plain english using proper grammar, but after awhile people eventually
get the idea of what is said.
Not that my novel is written that way but for people like you who cling onto only being able to understand something if it's perfectly within the parameters of proper grammar so much so you avert your eyes when you see something that's not; - I think is completely rediculous.
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Chapter One - Page Three
http://www.bookandreader.com/forums/writers-showcase/17109-181-chapter-one-page-three.html
What am I describing here?
I'm on a plane looking out the window, so amazed at what I see, nothing but blue sky and clouds.
It's not enough to write :
Wow, that's a pretty sky. Gee, look at those puffy clouds; everything looks so wonderful from up above.
Well yeah, duh.
What I need to do is to write something complex. I liken the sky to the varying shades of blue. A blue that never changes from the lightest to the darkest.
Like with the last page of text I posted on this website, even if to Eva and some of you, it's not
proper grammar or " the proper way " to begin, end or indifferentiate between sentences, the description of something, or writing the starting a conversation and then have it interrupted with a description of something else;
- all of that - hard cutting a reader from one thing to the other is the uniqueness and complexity that I'm looking for.
I don't want the reader always focused on one thing at a time, sometimes I may want a reader to experience things the way I sometimes do. Not in order, out of order, jumbled, twisted, discombobulated and as I keey saying.
Complex.
Thanks.
