Poem The First

[direstraits]

I do like the use of "thou". It adds a bit of swagger to it; not "a thousand pieces of art", just "thou art". Shorter, pithier, makes it more twitter-friendly.

You seriously became way funnier when I wasn't looking. I mean I laughed my ass out often enough, but this seemed another level.

Don't tell me - it's the pot noodles.

 

[beer good]

Don't tell me - it's the pot noodles.

Only if there's actual pot in them.

 

[direstraits]

Thou dost not say. Thou dost not say.

 

[beer good]

 

[sparkchaser]

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[Leonardo Noto]

My new poem

It's a little on the simple side, but I think that it's fairly original:


"Jesus wept."



I'm not much for words, but let me know what you think.

 

[canuck]

Sounds to me very much like the shortest sentence in the Bible if not identical!