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I just finished the prologue after thinking up the story in my mind (or atleast the main things). For sure, it's atleast 5 books .
The prologue takes place in a....just read it to know where it is. One thing to say is that it's modern times and this is just a prologue. The main character is a human who is forced through the burmuda (that's basically the "portal" or "path" to the lands. Why do you think people dissapear there? ) and must save the lands from a great evil that threatens to destroy the Lands and our world as we know it. Well, that's what I have in mind. The prologue is just a prologue so the plot won't be told. Also, I might change few things while I'm working on it. I just finished the prologue about 20 min ago. I finally am using the computer (Word) to keep my book instead of using a notebook.
One last thing, I'm only in 7th grade and am 11 (unbelievably if you know me in real life) so this might not be as good as others'.
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The 5 Elemental Lands
Prologue
Somewhere where humans can’t see, a place of wonders and magic, an evil thing was at work. At the center of the great elemental lands, was a great land filled with all the types of landforms on Earth as humans know it; deserts, forests, mountains, and more. Within there, at the center, there was a great mountain and around it a great city. Within the mountain lays great, ancient secrets.
There were 5 caves, with a guardian from each land; Fire, Water, Earth, Wind, and Electricity. You could not get in any other way than these caves. You could also not get in without permission from that guardian’s elemental king.
Danger didn’t only come from outside, but inside as well. A great ancient evil was locked away into the mountain, threatening to rise every century. Its power can convince minds all over the Lands to do its work. The elemental guardians or the kings didn’t know how to stop this, but they tried there best. To no avail, something always happened. Also, by every century, the dark ancient evil got stronger and brought stronger minions. The minions went down eventually but not without a cost. It was a war and people die in wars. Many died to protect the Great Lands.
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From each land came an inspector. They inspected if the elementals were hurt or dead, something got in the cave, if the elemental guardian needed an apprentice, etcetera.
All five inspectors came at the same time. That was forbidden because of the power coming in from all five sides, but here they came. The guardians didn’t know of this because the caves were positioned toward their land.
The fire inspector wore a red and black cloak around his body. This was what all the Fire Land’s inspectors wore, to show that it’s the inspector. The inspector’s were human and showed their face at all times but this one had a hat tucked on its head tightly and its face couldn’t be seen. The guardian, who wore all red cloaks and face was veiled by the cloak, was careful and knew a procedure to make sure it was an inspector.
When the inspector came only 3 paces away from the guardian, the guardian did its procedure. In a flash it was behind the inspector and a sword with a fiery blade came down its sleeve. It swung down at the inspector, who was not supposed to get hurt from the blade at all, but he dodged and took his own blade and made a move quicker the eye and the next thing the guardian knew, he was dead with a blade through his chest and was coming out the other side. The guardian instantly vanished in a red light. The same thing happened to all of the guardians. The criminals entered the cave in front of them, which was forbidden.
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I would like comments or suggestions. Also, I just copied this out of Word.
The prologue takes place in a....just read it to know where it is. One thing to say is that it's modern times and this is just a prologue. The main character is a human who is forced through the burmuda (that's basically the "portal" or "path" to the lands. Why do you think people dissapear there? ) and must save the lands from a great evil that threatens to destroy the Lands and our world as we know it. Well, that's what I have in mind. The prologue is just a prologue so the plot won't be told. Also, I might change few things while I'm working on it. I just finished the prologue about 20 min ago. I finally am using the computer (Word) to keep my book instead of using a notebook.
One last thing, I'm only in 7th grade and am 11 (unbelievably if you know me in real life) so this might not be as good as others'.
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The 5 Elemental Lands
Prologue
Somewhere where humans can’t see, a place of wonders and magic, an evil thing was at work. At the center of the great elemental lands, was a great land filled with all the types of landforms on Earth as humans know it; deserts, forests, mountains, and more. Within there, at the center, there was a great mountain and around it a great city. Within the mountain lays great, ancient secrets.
There were 5 caves, with a guardian from each land; Fire, Water, Earth, Wind, and Electricity. You could not get in any other way than these caves. You could also not get in without permission from that guardian’s elemental king.
Danger didn’t only come from outside, but inside as well. A great ancient evil was locked away into the mountain, threatening to rise every century. Its power can convince minds all over the Lands to do its work. The elemental guardians or the kings didn’t know how to stop this, but they tried there best. To no avail, something always happened. Also, by every century, the dark ancient evil got stronger and brought stronger minions. The minions went down eventually but not without a cost. It was a war and people die in wars. Many died to protect the Great Lands.
* * * *
From each land came an inspector. They inspected if the elementals were hurt or dead, something got in the cave, if the elemental guardian needed an apprentice, etcetera.
All five inspectors came at the same time. That was forbidden because of the power coming in from all five sides, but here they came. The guardians didn’t know of this because the caves were positioned toward their land.
The fire inspector wore a red and black cloak around his body. This was what all the Fire Land’s inspectors wore, to show that it’s the inspector. The inspector’s were human and showed their face at all times but this one had a hat tucked on its head tightly and its face couldn’t be seen. The guardian, who wore all red cloaks and face was veiled by the cloak, was careful and knew a procedure to make sure it was an inspector.
When the inspector came only 3 paces away from the guardian, the guardian did its procedure. In a flash it was behind the inspector and a sword with a fiery blade came down its sleeve. It swung down at the inspector, who was not supposed to get hurt from the blade at all, but he dodged and took his own blade and made a move quicker the eye and the next thing the guardian knew, he was dead with a blade through his chest and was coming out the other side. The guardian instantly vanished in a red light. The same thing happened to all of the guardians. The criminals entered the cave in front of them, which was forbidden.
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I would like comments or suggestions. Also, I just copied this out of Word.