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"The Trial Chair" (short story)

The Trial Chair (continued)

6.​


“I bet you’re hungry.” It was his captor. He held out to Charles a plate of rare-prepared meat. His face held Charles’ face; that same exhausted-worried expression. “I bet by now your stomach is churning for nourishment.”

Charles’ reflection smiled.

“How long have I been here?” Charles asked. He looked to his hands, which were no longer strapped down by tape, no longer pounded through by rails, but were now free except the rope that bound him to the chair, just above the elbows. No rails. No nails. No hamburgeresque toes smashed to the floor from what he could tell. Another sick dream? He wondered. The only other rope on his body wound around his waist and to the chair. He could feel it tight at his sides. For some reason, a Scarlett towel rested on his lap, covering his thighs and also his knees.

“Time really isn’t the issue here, now is it, Charles? Hungry?”

Indeed he was hungry. His stomach growled empty, as if he hadn’t eaten for weeks. He wasn’t thirsty, but for the blood sweating from the dish held before him.

“How do I know this isn’t another sick mind-****?”

His stranger in white simply stood there, the reflection on his face revealing a famished Charles, eyeing the meat.

“How do I know you haven’t poisoned it, so you can watch me suffer as my bowels explode? How do I know--”

“You don’t.” Charles’ face, as reflected by this man’s, smiled once again. “Hungry?”

“Eat shit and die,” said Charles.

“Would you rather have that? His face, still smiling, turned brownish-red as it looked to the plate in his hands. Thin strips of what looked like slightly cooked steak sat in their juices.

Charles imagined the salty taste in his mouth. His stomach churned once more.

He took a step closer, offering.

Charles reached for it, but his fingertips just met the edge of the plate. Rope held him back.

The face on this man was now Charles’. This face turned mad with rage, its eyes angry daggers.

“I’m messing with your mind,” said his captor, as he moved the plate closer.

Charles hesitated. It was tempting. It was also terrifying at the same time. But he needed the food. His body told him so. His body let him know he needed meat, needed blood. Iron. Potassium. It dizzied his mind.

The face in front of him looked undetermined.

“You think I would hurt you, Charles?” he said. “You’re only hurting yourself. Here...” and he reached for a piece himself, tweezing a dripping strip between his fingers. He brought it to his mirrored face--Charles’ face.

Charles watched as it disappeared behind his own reflection. He watched his own mouth chew it up, swallow, and even lick this man’s fingers clean.

“Now, isn’t that nice?” he asked. The face smiled.

Charles’ stomach eased a bit, perhaps relieved. He eagerly reached for a piece. Ate it. Took another. Ate it. And another. Ate it.

The face in front of him continued smiling.

His stomach urged for more.

“Hungry?” asked the stranger.

He was about to respond, but something wasn’t settling right. Pains grew in his abdomen. It wasn’t his stomach. It was lower. Suddenly, hunger left him. His thighs began to ache, progressively, to his knees.

Hungry, echoed the voice of the stranger.

A series of stings worked his legs as the room began to spin. Any moment Charles knew he would retch.

His captor fixed a strap of duct tape to Charles’ mouth, just in case.

Pain exploded from his waist down. His thighs stung as if again they were pierced by rails, his knees as if they were again smashed by claw hammer. Everything below his knees felt numbed, as if by Novocain.

It was then Charles realized it wasn’t a scarlet towel covering his lower half, but a white towel, soaked evenly though with his own blood. Other white towels lay scattered around, as well as used syringes.

A fire like sensation continued to burn in his lap as this man with Charles’ face removed the towel.

Charles managed to muffle another scream.

“Hungry?”


[ to be continued... ]
 
The Trial Chair (concluded)

7.​


In a cold, white room Charles awoke. Constraint was his first thought. Medicated the second. A hospital room. Strapped to a bed. Catheters stuck from the backs of his hands like nails, attached to hanging intravenous transfusions containing a clear liquid. Gauze and medical tape patched his arms and chest. A white sheet covered the rest of his body. Further up his arm held another catheter, attached to a hanging bag of blood. On the table next to his bed sat a covered tray of food. He watched as a doctor in a white coat passed by the window to his room.

Charles worked free his hands; the straps weren’t tied tight. He badly needed a drink, a hard drink, and a push of his drug. He sat up, and yanked the tubing free from his arm and from the backs of his hands. He ripped free the bandages over his body, opening the wounds underneath. And he uncovered himself from the sheet, only to find his legs missing.


[ the end ]


:(
 
[ the end ]

Thank God! No offence, sirmyk, but that was really horrible, and I don't mean that in a twisted-compliment way... I'm not notably squeamish, but this just read like gore-porn. However that's just a question of my tastes I suppose.

On a more structural note, it felt as though the delay in explanation for Charles's predicament (either within his hallucinations or in reality) was not from a desire to create suspense, but because the writer didn't know what was going to happen himself, and was trying to put off having to make that decision.

What was your purpose in writing the story? What were you seeking to 'say'?
 
Stewart said:
I'll print this off tomorrow and have a look soon, syrmik.
Much appreciated. This is still in draft form (obviously), so any suggestions would be helpful.


Shade said:
I'm not notably squeamish, but this just read like gore-porn.
Gore-porn... I like it!

This is the first "splatter-punk" story I've written. A friend of mine asked me to make him a character in one of my stories, and to involve a claw hammer, so this is what I came up with. I was trying for "squeamish", so I guess that part worked. This is the goriest I've ventured. And hopefully the goriest I will venture. Any gorier and things get corny.

...it felt as though the delay in explanation for Charles's predicament (either within his hallucinations or in reality) was not from a desire to create suspense, but because the writer didn't know what was going to happen himself, and was trying to put off having to make that decision.
Partly true. The original length for this story was about twice as long as this version. About halfway through, I realized a story with this much "yuck" would be difficult to trudge through, and readers would be thinking, "Just get it over with already!" Yeah, I could have kept torturing this Charles fellow for another twenty chapters, but... what for? The story developed as I wrote it (which is what I like most about writing), so, for the most part, I really didn't know what was going to happen until it happened.

What was your purpose in writing the story?
To write the goriest, sickest, most disturbing short story I could think of--based on a character name (Charles) and an object (claw hammer)--while still managing theme.

What were you seeking to 'say'?
Real horror isn't "gore" or "splatter-punk" or anything physical, but the instability of the human psyche.

I wanted readers to realize at the end that there was only one character in this story: Charles. The doctor/stranger/captor with the mirrored face... was simply Charles destroying himself.


Vespertilio91 said:
I got lost after chapter 5. Clarification?
Hopefully some of the above discussion helps to clarify.
 
It did. Lots. Thanks.

Sorry, it's 2:00 a.m. here. I don't feel like writing sentences longer than three words. Except these.
 
To be honest, after reading Shade's post, which he'd entered just after I said I would read it, I was put off reading it.

But, I've a long train trip tomorrow so I've printed it off. :eek:
 
Your story reminded me of Clive Barker, Hellraiser. I mean the leitmotiv "Man destroys self, self comes back to haunt him".

The beginning was breathtaking, so was the twist at the end. What was between though was too long to follow through carefully. As I am not an english speaker, I found it hard; and the endless gore details were no stimulant, so to say. (I love gore in controlled doses)

A BRILLIANT short story that gave me the creeps, was "The Chain" by an english writer whose name I can't recall. I 'll check it at home. It started just like yours, a person confined in a dark well. But the difference was, it was a tale of vengeance, madness, and a very original torture through a hot chain. And it was short.

Controlled length, reasons to sympathise with the victim/torturer, these are real stimulants, in my opinion.
 
renton said:
A BRILLIANT short story that gave me the creeps, was "The Chain" by an english writer whose name I can't recall. I 'll check it at home. It started just like yours, a person confined in a dark well. But the difference was, it was a tale of vengeance, madness, and a very original torture through a hot chain. And it was short.
Anyone know the author of the short story "The Chain"? As far as I have researched, I cannot find his/her name.

Stewart, were you able to make it through page one before shredding my story?
 
sirmyk said:
Stewart, were you able to make it through page one before shredding my story?
End of the second part. I'm busy. :eek:

Initial thoughts are that I'm just seeing this as an exercise in progressive violence with nothing much other than some sadism and swearing. I would have liked to see part two be a retelling of part one with details changing with each retelling. Alas...I've got someone getting butchered, it would seem.
 
sirmyk said:
Anyone know the author of the short story "The Chain"? As far as I have researched, I cannot find his/her name.

Stewart, were you able to make it through page one before shredding my story?

Sorry for the late reply, I had to go to my parents' house to get the anthology.

The writer's name is H. Warner Munn and the story was written back in 1928.

For more info:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/H._Warner_Munn
 
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